They say the odds against me are crooked and impossible
like I was born with a hole in my heart as an obstacle
or left to die by the doctors in the children’s hospital
but I never lose hope success is physic logical
the world is hostile and the street is my education
I look at the the Earth and say this my creation
I look at the stars and say this is my nation
It’s funny how on the block people will kill you for cash
but never raise the gun to cry out freedom at last
cuz they mind is narrower then the righteous path
my heart frozen but some how still getting colder
Atlas walking through the projects with the hood on my shoulders
I would like to raise my children to grow to be soldiers
but then a general would decide when they life will be over
my music is a universal language
like the sound of bullets emptying and reloading
people tell me love is forever
but I tell em love doesn’t need a complicated metaphor
and sometimes nothing needs to be said at all
sometimes the person you wit is not your one and only
and you mess wit them cuz you afraid to be lonely
But then again to find the true answer you have to look within your self
cuz the mind of a child is were the revolution begins
so if the solution has never been to look in yourself
how do expect to find it anywhere else
immortal technique
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Awh Teddy Bear It’s really qood.
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I like the “I look at the the Earth and say this my creation I look at the stars and say this is my nation” part
Your writtinqs really qood
Keep up the qood work
dude nice job i think itz better than tha first 1 u did….
Haha, i LOVED it. I think this can relate to alot of people. I like how you tied your other blog post into this one. I think you should continue doing raps, your really good at it. Great Job!
-Allison.
OH SNAP I REALLY LIKE THIS IS WAS COOL
I THINK YHU SHOULD MAKE A BEAT FOR IT AND RECORD
IT NICE SONG MAN!
ayy bruhh u got dis thang keep it up ayyy
This is really cool, I think my favorite line is “My music is a universal language” Great job.
I think this is very creative. You really put alot of thought into it. I liked it alot.
Dang! This was really good. (: Great job. Do you want to be a rapper when you grow up? Because im pretty sure you can make it. [:
Dude, this is the best thing I’ve read all day. Did you actually write this? If you did I have an awesome idea, If It’s cool with you, I’d like to play this for someone I know that might buy these lyrics from you. You could make some easy cash.
That was really great. Your really good at this kind of thing it sounded like a real song.
Wow!
You did a great job! You have mastered the ability to make a reader see a picture in thier head. I was actually visualizing everything you were saying. Hey, When are you going to write a sequel to your story I can wait to see the ending.
GOOD JOB!
wow !!!!
i think you did an amazing job with this!
keep up the good work your an amazing writer,
hey maybe one day you can make it big (:
Nice job. I wish I could come up with something likethis but I’m just not creative enough.
Teddybear , its real good ; i was there when you made it .! lolss (: creativee, you should make more like it .
dude this is a very cool song, you should make some more; maybe one day you will become famous
this is a very good poem! great job Cristian, this tells so much within a small poem. i really liked it and it shows what kind of things are happening to individuals that are going through some struggle.
dude this was O.k and awesome at the same time…..if you keep writiting songs you could be EPIC.
I LOVED thiss one! it was my fav!:D
not bad bruh, dat goes hard. nice work
I’ve been following your blog for awhile now, and I think this is the best thing you’ve written. Awesome that you’ve got so many comments on it, too!
Ha ha, that last comment was me but my name is not 4iamnotabot; that’s just the spam code or whatever. Oops. Anyway, keep up the blogging!